Just putting the finishing touches on Hip and Sage, and I thought I would ask your opinion. Is the following paragraph too gruesome for inclusion in a business book? It is the opening paragraph of an essay I am including in the book called, Tragically Hip (a funny look at the perils of going overboard with technology):
Sally was found in her fifth-floor condo face down on her computer keyboard. An orange Goddard College hooded sweatshirt and blue levis covered – like a pillow case covers a straw - her sucked in decomposing body. A pair of $300 Bose headphones were stuck to her red curly hair and ears. Her computer screen – still on - was filled with dozens of unanswered pop up IM windows and her Skype menu indicated that she had missed 47 calls. The coroner guessed that she had been dead for weeks. A few days prior, the police received an anonymous phone call from someone who was worried that screen name BikerChic64 from Seattle, WA, might be in some kind of trouble. Detectives worked with computer technicians at the King County Crime Scene Unit to determine BikerChic64’s identity and address.